Lovely imagery Richard. I love the 'spring is ready but winter comes first' line. It has a ring of optimism, spring is just waiting in the wings. Autumn's a great time of year, as long as you have a nice warm house to retreat to!
First I should say that my judgements are rather stuck in the early 19th century so I am not necessarily a good judge of other styles. However your poem is close to the sort of thing I like and try to write There are echoes here of powerful imagery as in your bereavement story which I was very impressed with. As a first draft they are all there which is good. However I am not sure it is in order to criticise presentation in a draft but as invited, here goes It seems to me there is possibly to many images which cramp rather than flow, as might befit a gentle autumn scene. I am not sure about-- line 4, “skids on the line”,“ nesting in potholes” Hope this is of some assistance Regards JW